So I've been at work on the words again. The trouble with rhyming, is that sometimes it means you have to phrase things in sort of an odd way. I'm trying to avoid that if possible. I think I've fixed two of the couplets that just needed work on the number of syllables. I tried to fix two others, but am not at all sure that they flow well now. I have also completely rewrote the last couplet (for Z) which would necessitate a picture taken in Austin during December...but I guess that's an entirely different problem. Let me know if you like the new last rhyme:
Z is for the Zilker tree
Spin around 'til you can't see.
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