Rhythm

So how do you keep track of they rhythm of words? Or how can I write it down in such a way that I compare the two lines of my rhymes? Does it matter if other people read at a different rhythm? Can I do more than just make it flow for my manner of speaking?

As you can tell the idea of getting the rhythm of each rhyme to math is only raising more questions. Until I can get a good idea of how to even chart down the rhythm I speak in I'm not sure I can really work on this (the math teacher in me needs a type of concise, exact manner of comparing). Would dots work?

Z is for the Zilker tree * * * * ** *
Spin around 'til you can't see * ** * * * *

Does this even matter? I kind of like this rhyme, but I'm not sure I could ever get every pair to have the same rhythm. Should I drive myself crazy trying?

Words

So I've been at work on the words again. The trouble with rhyming, is that sometimes it means you have to phrase things in sort of an odd way. I'm trying to avoid that if possible. I think I've fixed two of the couplets that just needed work on the number of syllables. I tried to fix two others, but am not at all sure that they flow well now. I have also completely rewrote the last couplet (for Z) which would necessitate a picture taken in Austin during December...but I guess that's an entirely different problem. Let me know if you like the new last rhyme:

Z is for the Zilker tree
Spin around 'til you can't see.